When the old man was looking the stars, the old man heard the sound of footsteps and there was a boy standing in front of the old man. The boy whose name is Kileken, introduced himself he is an orphan. The old man was so excited because he had a companion. They spent time together. Next morning, when the old man woke up, the boy had already prepared all the breakfast for the old man. The man was curious about the boy's behavior. How could the boy do all the morning chores before the sun came out? How? Also, he took the water from the spring(place) in a day. The old man asked how you could do all those works. The boy just said to trust him. Despite of his saying, he was curious. He decided to find out the boy's secret. At the break of dawn, the old man pretended to be sleep. At that time, the boy went to the waist-high grass and looked around cautiously. The old man followed. Suddenly, the boy raised his arms. Instantly the sun dimmed as a powerful glow spread down the boy's arms and through his body. And the boy turned around and found the old man hiding behind the tree. The boy had gone.
That night, one of the stars appeared which was missing. However, it neither flickered nor twinkled. The star is ther planet Venus. The Maasai call it Kileken, the orphan boy.
Your conclusion was great and I like your summurising the story by your own words. However, if you made the short sentences in a long sentences, I think it will be enjoyful for the readers. This is because umm.. most of your sentences were short so.. I think.. ye..
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OMG THIS IS PERFECT! Thank you I needed to make a summary so i took some ideas off some spelling errors were food but everything else was perfect THANK YOUUU
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